*Well done Alice, great use of speech and description. I enjoyed the end part where you see the hedgehog again. This was a lovely piece of writing because you used a fantastic range of punctuation!
I think you could improve by using different kinds of sentences like instead of using just complex use complex, simple and even one word sentences.
*Well done Alice, great use of speech and description. I enjoyed the end part where you see the hedgehog again. This was a lovely piece of writing because you used a fantastic range of punctuation!
I think you could improve by using different kinds of sentences like instead of using just complex use complex, simple and even one word sentences.